by Robert
abit too wordy and choppy to read I would revise alot of this poem make it more stream line get to the point faster ok take care. |
by Nici
I partly agree with Robert about this poem. There seems to be too much description in some places and not enough in others. |
by Naima
Thank you I really wrote this one from the heart as I do with most poems. This tells a story and I wanted to invite you all into this girls world so yeah thanx for reading.... |
Good poem!! nice job and great work!! 5/5! |
by Naima
Thanx Travis aww thanx and to everyone else who has voted and commented on my work thanx.I will try to read and comment on everyone else's work. |
by Darien
This is an awesome 'song' .. yup |
by Naima
really, darien? well I am a singer/songwriter.... so yeah get back to me on the song.... I really would like your imput |
by Jason Meres
Agreed. Well told. |
by Naima
thank you everyone!!!! |
This poem would be sooo good...if you changed somethings on it...but i guess that the original is the best...lolz...good luck in the future with ur poetry...very talented gurl |
by Naima
Thanx alot |