as i lye in a pool of my own blood, all i can think is how sorry i must be..

God can u hear me ... im sorry for all the trouble ive been....

then i see a bright light and all is lost...

then i here a great voice say do you want another chance?

and he leaves you to choose?

should i choose life or death?

i'll leave that up to you

ok how is that? all i can say is that i tried

Hey this poem is really good and to me it sounds done you did a great job. Keep on writing. Much luv
~Nikki~

I think you've said it quite good, and that was enough. You've expressed youself in such a great way.. not many people have the ability to do that. Be proud of it!!

LOVE IT! wonderfully penned! 5/5
xxEvilAngelxx

This poem has good rhythm. It is a fast read and that is why I like it. It is short and to the point.