good write.. very consistant flow to it. the only thing i might say is that there were a few awkward lines to read, not a big deal though.. overall it was a great poem! good work

sometimes the ones that come strat from the heart are the best :) it was a good poem :) good flow

straight oops :)

Thats a really sweet poem coming straight from the heart thanks a lot for your comment keep the good poetry up!

take care

thanks

Thanks!