ohhh i like.. nice imagery.. and good job with the rhymes :)

I like the usage of words, but try not to use too many captials.

This is such a great poem.... I absolutely loved it...I like the way you write you have so many words that nobody else thinks of using... good job...keep up the good work

ttyl
Maddy

Nice job, really nice. Horrible story told in a such a descriptive manner. 5/5.

very talented, very talented, liked everything about it, the words the picture the feelings, you are truly a great writer

The wording you used was great. These lines were especially touching:

She Awoke In Heaven
Death Had Sought To Kiss Her
As She Cuddled Amongst
Her Sorrows Final Whisper

Nice job. You took a commonly used topic, but you made it unique in your own way. The fact that you used capital letters for almost every word was distracting, but other than that this was a nice write.
Dorotea

all i can say is WOW!!! i loved it it really took my breath away maybe you could teach my how to write like that...... peace rel.....

Lol @ da Gurl Tawkin bouh Yo Capz... She owNno how we Do Huh Nikkz??.. Yea buh Chu knO yo PoeMz Be FiyyaHh... i owNni goT One... :|.. Lol.. iz coO doE.. iMma fiX dat reaH Quikk... Chea doe.. im Out...

-DaRrinAhThuGpoeT-

*Huggerz* Omfg D :)

wow so beautifully written i love your work =)
luv courtie xoxo

chilling tale!

wow this was so beautifully wriittin i loved it you are such a talented writer i read alot of your other poems and i liked what i saw....great job 5/5

Very good poem, the flow of the poem was really well done! it was sad and i could easily picture what was happening in my mind, awesome write! xxx

Another great poem i am adding you to my fav.

Hello, wow ur poem is really good, luvin the discription, thank you for your wonderfull comment lol and ur poem is great

Wow! nice poem!!

Very well done Nikki, I especially heart the end of the poem. Just wonderful.

"She awoke in Heaven,
Death has sought to kiss her,
As she cuddled amongst,
Her sorrows final whisper."

Nice imagery. 5/5.

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WOW! That was very deep and beautifully written. 5/5

Nice. At first I didn't think it was my kinna poem but it took me by surpise. I pictured it and then all the sudden this person in pane and misrable. Most of my poems are about death and stuff so yeah. By the way thanks for the comment. But yes it is true. But just so you know most of my poems are never true and I only take pleasure out of death if it's in my poetry. If you read my others you will see a lot of it and I don't want you to get the wrong Idea. 5 c ya.