wow..that was amazing so much feeling, so little words!

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Sorry I had to couldn't resist :D
This was really good especially after just reading first kiss because its kinda like the end and what not, ok finally I have a opinion on these lines "I would have done
Put my arms around you, or hold you
Why wasn't it done?" the done should be changed on one of them to make it easier to read and it would flow better.

Sadly enough thats all I got :(
I gotta make friends with a sh*t writer cause you bringing me down lol.

great work :D