It was short, but it flowed very well. The rhymes weren't forced either. It could be longer, but I very much enjoyed it. Thank you so much for all of your wonderful comments, I really appreciate it. 5/5.

well wirtten :)

dont know exactly what kinda fight this is but makes me think of my husband in iraq, so that means its gud, real gud.

o.o that was really good..i loved the rhyming...and the format helps it flow. i loved the last part..."indeed i was right, the enemy shot me down. I slid into darkness without any sound"

it was short, but full of emotion. i loved it! 5/5

Clear image and soo depressing. 5/5!