by Shædow Poet Jun 11, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
love is
Webs of cotton- pink, from his hand |
by Dorotea©
I cannot really give critique for this one, because I do not know even one word of French. Still, the French words seemed to fit in nicely, and gave this poem a sort of 'royal' look to it. Very nice job on that. As for the English, it was very original. I loved the line, "Whisks of mint from her lips.." Nice job, this poem portrays a lot of different feelings, and they were well woven together. |