Unfinished story

by Olivia   Jun 14, 2005


Hey everyone, this is a little story I wrote when I couldn't get to sleep one night...enjoy!!

"Look me in the eyes," She said with a shaky voice, "and then tell me you love me."
He looked at her, his eyes full of tears, and then looked down, "I-I can't." He whispered. Her eyes swelled up as tears began to stream down her face, and she let out a soft whimper.
"If you can't mean it when you say it, then don't say it at all." She looked up at him, "You were my world, you were my life, you were the one I trusted...You were the one I loved, and if you can't love me back, then I am not going to make my heart suffer any longer." And with those words, he knew his like was over, he knew he just lost the one most important thing in his life, his love, his heart...his soul.

Okay, so that is it, my best friend says I have to finish it, because It cant end that way, so everyone please tell me what you think, and tell me if I should improve anything, it would mean so much to me!!! Thanks!

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  • 19 years ago

    by xfAdInGxaWaYx

    It's g8 i dont think it needs an ending it's fine how it is

  • 19 years ago

    by xXlostXx

    hey i really like that.
    its very sad.
    keep up da good work
    5/5
    -xXlostXx