Wow i cant imagine what this wuld feel liek to a person but your words have touched me, in a way in which i will try to speak my mind more often especially to my friends, thanku xox sam

Wonderful
beautiful
touching
and has great rhyming

wow, well done my friend

Wow this is an amaazing poem...i really felt it while i was reading it. I love it great job 5/5

I love the last part about being an angel on earth. I'd be lying if I said it didn't bring a tear to my eye. Really inspirational, 5/5 xXx

Nice =]

This is a great poem a real joy to read

Nice Dude.
I really like it...
And I agree...

This poem really touches me because It reminded of me of exactly how I feel. This is really GOOOD........

Wow. Right now, I can relate to this in so many different levels. I have a friend...and wow. It was like you were taking the words from my mind, and making them sound better, and more beautiful, and putting them into a poem. I was nearly in tears. Seriously, I think this poem has spoke to me more then any other poem on this site lately. Great words. I loved it. Great metaphors, and flow and rhyme, haha just wow. Excellent read. 5/5 [:

I love that! good job =]

Brilliant, really breathtaking.. Last verse is my favourite, great work

Wow, this was truly amazing. you did such a good job... <3!

Wow good work.

This made me cry!!

Your work is amazing, you should be so proud of yourself you're so talented 5/5

Your work is amazing, you should be so proud of yourself you're so talented 5/5

Your work is amazing, you should be so proud of yourself you're so talented 5/5

Awwe.., it almost made me cry :'(
this poem is so touching..

This poem fits my life right now, only I think it's I'm more like the person you're writing to. I hope this doesn't sound rude, it is merely my way of saying that I relate. I'm sorry, but its true.

Your laughter speaks the loudest
And you tell me that you're fine
Angel, don't you lie to me
It's time to draw the line

^ This is a great way to start. It really pulled me in, and it showed me where your heart is. In a way though it made me feel like you were angry at this person for lying, instead of being sympathetic as I later learned you are.

Tell me why you're breaking apart
And why it hurts to give a smile
Give me a chance to let you in
And you'll find that it's worthwhile

^^ Here I realized you meant the first bit as a friend, not harsh or sad. I also began to saw how much you care for this person.

I can tell you're trying so very hard
To swallow your faults and fears
I can hear you when you whisper
"If you only knew of all my tears"

^^ This stanza is just good for back story and explaining why/ how you know something is wrong. It's always nice to know why someone thinks you are upset and you always wonder if you should tell them and trust them or not. If I were in your person's shoes yes, I would have told you after this.

You're losing yourself a little at a time
I see you're starting to fade away
Angel, don't you lose your hope
If you come to me, I will stay

^^ This stanza is the love, the warmth, what everyone wants to hear when things are bad. This is the stanza that stands out the most to me. I love the way you make it a point to say that you will in fact stay. Which is nice because people are always afraid they will lose all the ones that are close to them just because they can't control the way their life is going.

"What's wrong", you're always asked
You return with the same reply
"Nothing, I'm okay..." said with
a disheartened twinkle in your eye

^^ I like how this one is simply information. There's not emotion, but that's o.k. because all of this piece is emotion.

I can see the suffering you lock away
With all of the memories that you keep
I can always see your tired face
From when you cry yourself to sleep

^^ Story and love. Simple and perfect. Short and sweet.

It's quite obvious that you want to go
But, you can't leave me here alone
Angel, Don't you let go of your life
I'll fill the gaps that need to be sewn

^^ A wonderful way to lead yourself into a conclusion. I love it. Wow.

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If only I told you everything that I felt,
And if only you knew of all my love
Then maybe you'd be my angel on Earth
Instead of an angel flying up above

^^ This part made me cry honestly, sorry, but it did. It's so sweet but it breaks my heart. I love the emotion and detail. Excellent conclusion.

All in all, I love this piece. There is so much love and detail. The rhyme scheme was stunningly beautiful for being so simple - nice job! I think the way your voice stands out in this piece is great. Fantastic job, beautiful piece.

- M.R. K.

P.s. sorry about the long comment, this one is just something i relate to and that is well written.

WOW, 100/100, I loved that tooo much for any words!