It is madfry!!!! ( i think) if you are some stranger i dont know, then i am very sorry and i am just stupid and you can ignore me. BUT.....if you are my little madfry or Maddymaddness then YEY!!! you wenton the site!!! very good poem indeed. very good. good imagery

Pah. Hmph.

You would be an AWESOME writer. If you can write poems like this, wow just thinking of the level you could take it to with stories.
A fantastic poem - SO much description and woah you have left me speechless! AMAZING.
The only thing I can say is that you don't need capitals at the begining of each line, only at the start or after a full stop.

Well done and keep on writing!

-Lyd