Comments : FireWall

  • 19 years ago

    by Renee

    This was a good poem. It had a good comparison and story. I would've like to hear more about that comparison though. Like, go deeper about the firewall. and also, the last line,

    "As her life flooded out of her body like a flood"

    was redundant. I think you could've used a different word for the first flooded instead of repeating it at the end.

    But the story was great, and It was a well written poem, other than the minor implications I pointed out.

  • ouch... sorry if i dont give it the comment it deserves its really good but im just a lil pissed off right now (nothing to do with u hun) anyway im gona try and focus on your poem (very hard) well i thought it was good with great flow and rhyme pattern well done
    >>5/5<<
    *bec* xXx

  • 19 years ago

    by Gianna

    wow great poem... you put your words together very good i love it 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    Very well done! Nice amount of detail and good flow throughout! Very creative way of putting things into perspective! Keep it up! Take Care! Brooke~

  • 19 years ago

    by Carmen

    omg, that was so sad! i loved how your words just fit together perfectly... great poem! 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Katrina Boblina

    wow....this is one of my favorite poems ever! great job and please dont stop wrighting!

  • 19 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    Very well written! enjoyed it!! keep up the great work! you flowed it nicely and worded it in very well! 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Katrina Boblina

    aww thats sad. grat job though. keep writing:)

  • 19 years ago

    by Vanessa Lea

    Great work, it definately deseves the great rating that it has! Eager to read more!

  • 19 years ago

    by Darien

    Good use of metaphors! Awesome job :)