It cripples me, boils inside of me

That's probably the best line from a teen I have read in a long, long time. A very good effort Sean, you certainly have potential.

As an exercise try writing the same poem with half the words.

B

A beautiful poem, however I am not too big on all the commas after each sentence. I don't believe they are necessary and can be used now and again for effect. But, if that's what you like, then dont pay heed to my comments.
I loved your wording; simple, yet at the same time indepth and, of course, unique. Your style was attractive- I enjoy a good poem without a certain scheme.
Lovely job!