It's really good, but the last 4 lines don't really seem to fit...It's like you have two ideas and they aren't quite meshing right, maybe a little transition thingy? Well, don't mind me, I'm not that great so, yeah!

I liked this poem, and as usual its brilliant however, i dont think the last few lines fit well with it. Maybe you could have phrased it a little differently however, it would be better without those lines on this particular poem. But great job!

Ana*