I really liked this poem, your a very talented writer, I just have a few suggestions:

1) I personally do not put commas and periods in my poems, just because it takes more time, and sometimes I mess up and put a comma where it shouldn't be, things like that.
2) Capitalize every word that begins each line, it looks alot more official.

Your rhyming was perfect though, and I loved your techinque. I just loved the whole poem in general, besides the commas and capitalization, the poem was awesome. Your very talented, keep up the great work. xX

This was a good peice of work but due to your youth you see time alittle bit differently then I don't worry that will come with age very good start none the less...

I am not much for the poems about a specefic persons life, but I like the way that you changed it in the end to a little more, that was unexpected.

That is saying a lot

Aww. i love when people write poems about friends. so cute

That was gud, too.. but it didnt touch me as your other poems, maybe coz im so sleepy or smthn :P.. anywayz, im glad u got such gud friends..
keep it up

Thought it was pretty good had nice flow

Very good. I liked it a lot!

-Taylor

Damn
deep
this means so much more than words would admit

The beginning has nothing to do with the poem, so it adds kind of a shadowy cast. you should take away the first two stanzas and add more to your emotions of being a prisoner. if you're free to roam, (like you mentioned in the third stanza,) your not really a prisoner. you need to revise this one a bit.

Okay once again i love how you write your true feelings down i think your a very talented writer it was a bit choppy but if i was your friend and you wrote this for me i would be thrilled it is very thoughtful and the idea itself and the kindness and the thought that you actually appriciate these people gets this poem a 5/5 on its own great job

Amazing job. but i'm really lost with this poem to tell you the truth. Like i understand the beginning and then all of a sudden like it switches i mean i shouldn't be talking but still. I dunno who knows. but you did an amazing job. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.