i can't really relatet to parents kicking you out..but lots of emotion...good work..keep it up

Melanie,

Sorry, don't take it the wrong way, but dought should be spelt doubt.

The poem is good.

Best regards,

Steve

Poor spelling and poor grammar(or lack thereof) can in a lot of cases be an easy turn-off to reading your work..i read the title of another poem called "misunderstod" its really misunderstood* but this is just an example.. as in your other piece, the language leave a bit to be desired.. words flow pretty easy, but ur rhyme schemes are a bit overly simplistic.. this, coupled with the language you used, makes a bad combo.. im not saying your poetry is bad at all, because thats really just an opinion, but just tryin to help you grow if i can.. i cant stress the importance of vivid language,.. use only what u know(thats all u can do really in poetry), but strive for difference.

i feel like (our*) relationship has (travelled*) (too*) far

u could elaborate on this and explain how it's travelled.. also u could tie it up with a simile or a metaphor, comparing the relationship with something else that's travelled too far,.. and as a whole u could say why you got kicked out and all that good stuff..

is way more strong and way more real

more strong really should be stronger. there is a difference, however know when to use a modifier(-er) and know when to use (more) because more real IS right. hopefully im writing clear enough to be of any help,.. anyway.. using 'way', i think, makes it sound a bit more elementary then you need.. keep writing and try different techniques(metaphors/comparison, different rhyme schemes, different ideas, etc..) ne way.. pZ out =O)