Extremly sensual and breathtaking imagery within this piece, once again as always i find it hard to give criticism..

One thing i would say however is that the grammar of this piece chops up the flow, too many commas and long sentences make it hard to keep my eye on the piece as i read through.

Wonderful intelluct you have, and a vocabulary to match, the olde english style i like but it doesn't seem consistent throughout the poem.

Obviously just my thoughts etc, the writers intention for the piece always matters though so you don't have to agree with me.

good poem.

Excellent flow & GREAT description! 5.

Oh... gorgeous. I loved the old language feel- gave it a more pure love, a beauty that can hardly be found in love poems these days. I loved the description, the imagery. I felt serene reading this piece.
One thing, however, is your grammar.
"Painting a picturesque this heart shan’t forget"
it should be 'painting a picturesque IMAGE', I think. sorry if I am wrong.
But other than that, it was lovely!

This is truly a beautiful poem, I thought it sounded much Like Shakespear.. Well done.

A huge Five.
Love,
Libby

Wow This Kind Of Poem Just Leaves You Speechless...This Was Beautiful...Great Descriptive Metaphors...Sounded Like Something Very Perfessional 5/5 Definatley xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Hmm, well.. It was a well written, cute and beautiful poem and it feelt as it there was alot of emotions put in to it. But, I also feelt that it started out with "new english", but torwards the end there was a bit of "older english" words. Didn't like that personally, feelt as if it didn't work together. But overall it was a good poem:)

Best wishes,
Patrik