this is such a dark poem, its really eerie and full of suspense, i dont know if you did that on purpose but it really is and its amazing. it such an unusual poem as well (sorry, youve got an essay in the making here) and youvemixed together so many differnet images of conflicting feelings and it works SO WELL!!!! ahem....calm down lucy....where was i?...oh yes, amazing poem. wow...very good indeed, *bows in worship*....write more! write more!
Lucyfer
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Damn girl, this is more like it 5/5

Hey this is well written again...I would love to see you write something lighter...but i understand why you don't...i guess it would be fake if you did...

A bit like how i can't manage to write a dark poem

Thank you all for your comments. This was a true story as well. I'm glad you liked it...

Eden