Wow, Allison here and thanks that means alot.

hi! i liked it! i ryme in my poems too! i personally like that darker sode of poetry...its what i write best! but i haven't posted many of my poems her so...but it was good...keep em coming

OMG!! DO NOT DO THAT!!! please...that's so sad...he isn't worth it...someone better will come along, i promise..it was a really good poem, i liked the word choice and rhyme...it was good!

amazing :)

good luck moving on ? i'm sorry for whoever said that to you. this is an amazingly written poem. it got to me it was heartbreaking and powerful. keep writing and don't ever give up on anything. remember no matter whats going on in life there is always something better ahead of you but saying goodbye is not the answer to your questions right now.

nice job! i saw a couple little things here and there that i would fix/change, but it's nothing big...nice flow, great wording!

Well I will start by saying I hope this is just a writing and not real life.

This piece is full of emotion. The pain of losing someone can be so hard and you have portrayed that through your words.

My favorite lines..."Here's the gun thought I’d never have to touch
But here it is in my clutch" I don't like the thought of it but you put it down nicely although I think you could maybe use a different start to the first line. Maybe something like "The very thought of the gun I'd never touch...." Not telling you to change it just making a suggestion. I know I don't change my writing because someone said so...but I do appreciate the feed back...

Don't ever think you have to be prettier! That won't make him stay and if it did why would you want him anyway....NICE WRITE! :)

I dunno if its "Slang" or not...hmm, but its interesting. Its a two lined stanza which makes it less common. Very emontional. As I always say the fact that there is passion in a poem is the main thing. X