Very good.. i liked how you kept the same line all the way through.. i have tried that a couple of times but never been really able to pull it off.. outstanding!! very good poem.. bye bye EJ

Omg.. i really really liked this one! It was awesome. I love the repetition. Great Job!!

Love Alwayz,
Katie Schettler

thankx yall for the wonderful comments and birthday wishes.

Very Interesting piece of writing, really makes you think, Excellent Job!

Very nice poem....Good to have you back and write poems,once again...keep writing and keep always smiling....and belated Birthday wishes....take care...FIVE>>>

Well happy belated birthday! i would really love to hear the type of poem this is, i want to try this unique style.... it flows so well, and has alot of depth.. again, great poem as usual! your definitely on my favorites list