Good rhyme scheme, well thought out and it flows through to the end.

There are one or two grammatical errors (spelling, too instead of to and God is capitalised) and it would benefit greatly from proper punctuation to highlight the correct areas and give it a clearer rythm. Would be a sure fire 5 with those points fixed.

A hard hitting account of the price of irresponsability. Great job.

B

Chris, pm me so I can send you the revised version along.

Hey wow!!! This poem is very deep and beautiful I like it. It is sad but really good. If you can will you comment on my poems thx.

hey, I'm sorry that happened..if you need to talk I'm here. Great job. <3

aww hunny im sorry

Oh my gosh. That poem is great my eyes were tearing up just reading it. i am so sorry about that. keep writing bcuze youre really good at it.

Wow...that is powerful and sad and altogether lovely...you really put your feelings into that piece! Bravo!!

a great poem...pretty sad and made me cry a little..but awesome...sorry about what happened in ur past tho..good job.

That was a really great poem. I really liked it. keep it up. I'd love to read more of your stuff. Please check out my poems. Good luck in the future!

hey, your poetry is super powerful, i enjoy reading your poetry. i too know how hard it is to cope with the past, but always we have to so is look to the future, to the better days ahead.

what the fuk do you mean the rhyming is forced. i believe you are a complete dumbas s but here try this rhyme out and tell me if you like it any better. hickory dikory dock chip suck my cock

HeY chRIs... that was a mad... sounds kind of familiar to something my friend went thri but his g/f survived... keep it up sweetie...

it must've been hard to post this but it's good

it was good but confused me on who was driving and who was killed but it still was way good love and peace Rylee

OMG!! that was amazing. I really liked it. You did very good at writing it. I wish there was something I could say. Good job 5/5. 2 THUMBS WAY UP!!!!!! check out my poems if you can.. Thankx

Very powerful poem. Really sad but very good. Maybe someone will remember this poem when they are thinking about drinking and driving.

Clouds n ur Is.

HEY WHEN I FINESHED READING YOUR POEM IT TOUCHED ME REAL DEEP HOPEFULLY UR OVERCOMING THAT SITUATION. I WISH U THE BEST AND KEEP UR HEAD HELD HIGH BECAUSE NOMATER WHERE UR LADY IS SHE IS STILL TAKING CARE OF U SO DONT DO STUPID SHIT ANY MORE PLZ.
ALWAYZ-N-FOREVER
ME

its alrite ull be ok thanx 4 putting it on here it helps the restof us no not to do drugs or drink cuz it could happen 2 ne1

wow its vrey well written im so sry for ur loss

that was a really good poem. sad...but good.