Wow girl this is really really good... keep up the awesome work!

5/5 you deserve it!

xx, Porter

this poem is very well written.
keep it up.
much love, Marjan

wow i love it! nice work
~lindsey

wow i love it! nice work
~lindsey

Very expressive. It's written very well. Keep it up! Thank you so much for the comment on my poem!!

Rachel Morgan

This is a really really good poem..I luved it..it was very deep and had a lot of meaning keep up the great work.5/5
*~*evans*lil*hottie*~*

another fantasic piece of work :d keep em comin xox

Intense...the swelling of the water mirrors her life so she can speak of it longingly.
I loved the interums where you said again: "Falling broken, falling down, falling deep
Losing you, losing life, losing what I keep".
You script misery and acceptance superbly, attached with a so called "wild style" as far as form goes...I can certainly respect that for being just as guilty in my hand *smiles*.
Bravo~

kt this is awsum! (like all ur others!) thnx for the advice and cant wait for u to do another poem... every1 thinks its awsum!
gr8 work!
luv ya
amy

hey, REALLY aweseme, creative, and original poetry.. u said you wanted constructive critisism, but there isn't that much for me to construct on you! ur good. i do however have one suggestion!! if you wanna make your poems flow better try this... try having a set number of syllables for each line!! like.. it has to have that many.. once you do that.. you can have a set number of syllables for each poem, but you will be able to tell if it needs more or less!! try that.. if it doesn't help, then...well.. i don't know then.. lol!! hopefully it will help
peace,
ABCEDE

Thankyou *blushes* (",) It is nice to know my writing is enjoyed by all ages!

THis seems more of a song then a poem, but its a good read..something you might want to think about:
dieing alive is an oxymoron. it contridicts itself, and confuses people like me. lol. The images in this poem are great, how you related yourself (or the character) to a puppet was wonderful!

~Breeze

Supreme Poem. Great use of metaphor, drowning now he longer is with you. Excellent Poem!!!! Kind regards from Kane

Hey Broken misery!
Hope your ok!
First of all, thanks for the comments on my poems! and secondly, WOW!!! I cant belive you are only 14yrs old- this poem is really, really good! I have to agree to Bob, the lines:
"Chains hanging smothered in frost
Fingering my neck until the game is lost" amazed me! this poem is really descriptive and gives you the images in your head when you are reading it!

You are an amazing poet, which will get better still as you get older!

Keep writting and you will go far.

Lots of love
Kay x

This is one amazing poem. I enjoyed it very much. You have much talent and are one of the gems on the site. Keep on writing, you will be an outstanding writer.

Warmest regards,

Steve

:'( i love it.. great poetry

WoW i loved it it was X-cell-ent
AWEsomE!!!
~HazE

hey, i tought this was deadly the flow was great and the way you put it all together was good..I don't really think theres anything you could do to make it better i enjoyed it the way it was :D

much love x)

that was so sad.. i loved the tinge of .. i dunno.. bitterness, maybe?? am not sure.. but it was overall gr8.. i din reli lyk it from the beginning, but it improved a lot by the middle and the end..
keep up the talent
and thnx 4 helping me out with the poem
nonz

This is very emotive and powerful. Great job! Read some of mine if you get time.