I really like the message.. Maybe break it up every four lines to keep each idea separate. :) It is really nice, though. I haven't exactly found too many life poems I've enjoyed but this one was really good.

I like it. i love the repeating. i esp love the last two stanzas. they are so touching

This is excellent. beyond excellent. flows well, message is great, the words you used and how you used them. the repeating line is fabulous. i mean i dont know what to say. great job!

I must say this is a real good poem. It has some kind of meanung and well written.

A true example of unique and sophistacated writing.Good Work. If only you feed a little bit more to your readers I feel you cut it short to eairly I also read some of your other work and feel the same way to .But Great Work!