great poem, and good ryming words!

great poem! and i like your ryming words ^_^

omg i love your poems! i really hope you'll read mine there not really good though

good poem 5/5
thanks for the comment

I like the rhyming, but the AABB pattern gets dull after a while. Perhaps AABB ABAB would mix your poems up a bit. I'm not trying to be mean, just construtive, nice poem. = )