Broken girl

by cαtαstrophe--x   Jun 24, 2005


Heres to the dreaded night,
when you sit in your room alone,
pondering up memories,
slowing breaking down your soul.

Everyday is so fake,
you smile for everyone to see,
your like a messed up Barbie doll,
pretending is all you'll ever be.

That smile may fool everyone but,
is it fooling you?
is it making you feel better?
to pretend it isn't true?

Locking up your memories,
and throwing away the key,
thats what you want to do,
but i guess that wasn't meant to be.

Time will heal it all, my dear,
your heart was ripped apart,
but together we can mend it,
we can fix your broken heart.

Don't just leave it up to me,
you have to believe in yourself,
I'm here to fix your broken heart,
but I'm going to need your help.

Everybody goes though pain,
it's just a part of life,
I'm always here to lend a helping hand,
to be a part of your life.
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(c) Rachel 2005
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  • 19 years ago

    by Forsaken Redeemer

    You don't need any form of criticism on this, even constructive, you just need to keep writing poems like this, it's amazing and you have a real talent, i know everyone says that on this site but in your case it's really true

    xXx

  • 19 years ago

    by Anarchy-In-The-UK

    okay..

    Then I'll read some of yours...
    This is really really great! <3
    Very good writing

  • 19 years ago

    by Theresa

    One word:
    Fantastic.

    <3 Moe

  • 19 years ago

    by dyingxpassion

    it like how i feel...and how people alway tell me they are there for me..when ever i need them...
    5/5

    bridget

  • 19 years ago

    by sHaTtErEdMiStAkE

    Hey you're a really good writer i like your use of rhyming words they're really good...keep on writing and thanks for the lots of comments they mean a lot

    ttyl,
    Maddy