damn ur a great poet nvr stop 5/5

Oh, I like this poem. I really, really, really like the verse: "but this girl is lost/and she cannot be found/she is falling in darkness/without any sound. It's beautiful. However, I'm not too sure about the last line, it seems a little forced and out of subject. Maybe it's just becuase I don't understand what you're trying to say. Care to enlighten me?
Also, thank you veyr much for commenting on my poems. I really appreciate it.
Keep up the good work, and I'll check some more of your poems out,
xoxZoexox

again with the ryhme... its realy good though

This poem really shows off your talent and i love your wordplay. You can really create vivid pictures by the words you use. Thanks for the comments on mine!
love always,
Chelsey