The Night Goes On

This is more like a song and its kind of long. i tried to write it but i don't know if its any good so let me know what you think honestly

She cries tonight
but worse than ever, she wont fight
the pain has taken over,
soon will be the end

The night goes on
as she slips away
her mind began to stray

hiding the truth with a smile
she's been gone for a while
only half there
wondering why don't anyone care

The night goes on
as she slips away
her mind has began to stray

she reaches into the black
hoping to find the love thats been lacked
all she finds is what will end the pain
on the floor a blood stain

The night goes on
as she slips away
her mind began to stray

its all gone everything she worked for
as her soul will poor
her heart shall fly
and no more screams will she cry

The night goes on
as she slips away
her mind began to stray

one last tear will run down her cheek
one more thought to make her weak
eyes shut tightly and suddenly she is free
the heavens she will see

The night goes on
as she slips away
her mind began to stray

morning is here as her parents stand
above her holding her hand
she is gone for good
to know why they should

But the night went on
as she slipped away and her mind did stray, caught up she's gone with a tear!!!

~please tell me what you think and vote~