When I look into your eyes
A chill runs down my spine
My body goes numb,
And my head is filled thoughts of only one
I know sometimes I may think with my penis
But make no mistake, I really mean this
With every breath, with every heartbeat,
Arise new feelings of concrete`
Now take this pen, hold it steady…
And complete this circle of love…
when you’re ready
"Now take this pen, hold it steady…
And complete this circle of love…
when you’re ready"
That last line is just the perfect finish for the poem, because it shows that you're willing to wait for her. It was short and sweet, I really liked it. Great job, I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work.
-Jaime