is okay, not ur best, but still good, i like readin other peoples work, it shows me wat i need to work on and it also shows me wat i need to not work on for a little bit,
love,
brandon

I can see you hating me, I notice another mistake that is natural with emotional expression, but you spelled minute wrong, you spelled it as minuets. I hope this helps so correct spelling is minutes. I hope this helps, but this is another great poem. All the advice I have people given me, I will pass it on. If you would like, also I will dig out writers news website for you and everyone.