whoever gave this piece a one is an idoit and obviously doesnt understand writing.
you used the profanity so strongly that it made your point so clear.
and since you dont use it often in your other work, it just exemplifies the meaning.
you did a great job,
most people cant get the porfanity thing to work, but you pulled it off
i applaud you.
5/5

i agree with jen... this is a really good poem and it gets right down to the point...good work
5/5

hun, you could make this better... if youw ant it to be like a rap, make it longer, add some stuff to it... but you do have a chill topic here... keep it up!
amanda

haha awesome poem, i thought it was funny!

lol very straight forward..i kinda like it...lol...nice job...luv yas mwah

-kayla-