My whole body shaking
my tiny little heart braking
all because of you
i thought this love was true
you told me you loved me
standing across from the sea
you told me i was pretty
and acted quite witty
you asked me my name
and from that moment nothing was the same
you kinda hurt me in a lot of ways
but i thought i would 'get over it' in a couple of days
and after that when i saw you in town
you made me feel so upset and down
you just shouted all the time
i was in pain because you weren't mine
you pind me against the wall
you kept screaming at me,a nd making me feel so small
you embarrassed me in front of everyone
me and you was good at first but then we lost all the fun
but in the end, I'm the happy one
i have someone who loves me and i love him too
he treats me so brilliant
i love him because hes just not like you!
This is a good poem but, you might try to get off rhyming so much and make more of a point...rhyming doesn't make a poem good, the words do! Again, good poem!
