Hey,not bad,not bad.But where is the feeling?where's the action? why are you writing this? your tlling of someone killing someone.any one with a brain could do that. but why is he killing you? think about these questions.

Very nicely written as always.. Defiantly one of my favorites.. Creative and full of emotion.. Keep writing and take care (always))xx:

*> : PainOfOne

wow... another amazing piece!!!
-xXx-

A story more than anything else. But a very captivating one at that. Loved the ending.
-A

Wow both of those were amazing, and pretty scary from each perspective, brilliant work, well done to you..

xxxxx

That was amazing Andrea! This poem was so awesome. I loved how you wrote it. It was so descriptive and I could picture in my mind everything that was going on throughout the poem. Just amazing job! I wuv you! <33

~Krissy

*hugs*

pure genius

you did a beautiful job showing what both people were thinking and how well you fit them together! i give you credit! but you are one of my favorite poets on here and as i read your pieces of work i can definately see why you are on that list! can't wait to see more from you!!

~PLP~ lil slam~ lots of hugs and love~

omigoodness! i'm going to have nightmares! ><
good job!! 5/5
-kit <33

wow I don't know how you do it but everytime I read your poems I get chills...you have a lot of talented you should be proud