by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex Jul 3, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
The beginning of my story, and I want some comments on it and what you think. I know this is poems, but I didn't know where else to put it on here, so enjoy. |
by anna
Fu(kin awesome!!! well done!! i love ur stuff!! |
=O It's so incredibly unique with so much emotion and truth. My favorite part is the last few lines. Im in shock. Great write. |
by Esther
I like this poem a lot! and how you've built it all up, to the very last line 'i am death'! i think all your poems are magical in some way or another!! (soz if you wanted critism but 1. i can't find any faults. 2. I'm not good at giving it!) |
Creepy, dark, great poem. but it does need some work like that which kristen says. but seriously this story kept me guessing, i was glued to the screen, twisted dark. great imagery too. i got chills.. i even freaked out a bit when i read the window part(im sitting ym a window and my mom walked by and the lbinds are down and i didnt know it was her lol) |
by Megann Lee
Ohh. You would make a wonderful Author. I like this story. It was nicely written and I didn't get bored while reading it. I actually wanted to read more and finish it. Your writings are very creative Hun. I think that is good, cause there are people who cn't seem to be creative enough or want to be creative or unique. But I love your poems and this story. I'd love to read another story or something if you add another one to the site. Anyway I have rambled quite abit. Haha. Take Care. :] |