Wow, this is very...different, but in a good way. 5/5

this was really deep, & creepy anyway i really liked it..

your sotry for what? is it a story you're writing? if so i would like to read it or what you've gotten done or whatever.. i write stories myself.. but i dont think they'll ever get published... but yeah... good job
take care of you
amanda

Can't wait to see that on the shelves

Well done, that is so great I like the way its deep and realistic... keep it up, Well done agn

That is really deep. It gave me chills at the end---very unique write-I love it! Great work on this piece. I totally enjoyed reading it---5/5 Keep it up!

Very dark indeed. Loved it! Bizarre and beautiful! You are a great poet! *applause*

Wow...That was really really good.. Like..it wasn't that long. I really enjoyed it and it was purely amazing. Hence since it was something involving darkness, that made me love it even more. It's fantastic, and well written. Great Work.

Woh this is really good and so dark! There are a few things like Kristen mentioned, but mostly it is very good. I would be interested to read the rest of this story if it is written yet? Take care,
- Polly

Wow amazing work! this was a GREAT story WOW! im like :O...i loved the descriptions, the sadness, the emotion, everything! 5/5

Really liked!! it was so honest! it was like u put whatever u wanted n aren't bothered bout the consequences!! LOVED IT!! 5/5 i hope ur gonna write more like this! or extend this one!!

Ohh. You would make a wonderful Author. I like this story. It was nicely written and I didn't get bored while reading it. I actually wanted to read more and finish it. Your writings are very creative Hun. I think that is good, cause there are people who cn't seem to be creative enough or want to be creative or unique. But I love your poems and this story. I'd love to read another story or something if you add another one to the site. Anyway I have rambled quite abit. Haha. Take Care. :]

Creepy, dark, great poem. but it does need some work like that which kristen says. but seriously this story kept me guessing, i was glued to the screen, twisted dark. great imagery too. i got chills.. i even freaked out a bit when i read the window part(im sitting ym a window and my mom walked by and the lbinds are down and i didnt know it was her lol)

but keep it up, this was lieka riddle/story. i cant wait to read another.

5|out of|5

Tiny Heart`'*+

- i know my siggys have gotten very weird..lol. but i gotta keep them edgy!

xD

I like this poem a lot! and how you've built it all up, to the very last line 'i am death'! i think all your poems are magical in some way or another!! (soz if you wanted critism but 1. i can't find any faults. 2. I'm not good at giving it!)

=O It's so incredibly unique with so much emotion and truth. My favorite part is the last few lines. Im in shock. Great write.

Fu(kin awesome!!! well done!! i love ur stuff!!