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Aww

Sad...but I really like this.

Umm...title, title...A Dark Goodbye, perhaps?

Kinda stupid, I know...idk

Anyway, REALLY like this! Really cool...really sad.

5/5
Keep writing!

I thought it was a pretty good poem. I was hoping for a little more description and maybe a longer poem but that's just me. The flow was pretty good so you didn't have problems there. Overall I think it's a four.

My Last One For Today, i'll Do 10 More Tomorrow & So On.. Also, Until i've done 76(The # You Have Written As Of Today) You Will Be On My Faves And i Will Add Anymore You Write Onto That Number..(i Figure if i Do The 'Month" Thing i'll Never Finish. xD)

** if That Makes Absolutely No Sense WhatsoEver.. Just Tell Me.**

It was ok, good not great..

it could be longer.. to give more details.

one other thing- i think these two lines should be switched-
But this he did not know,
And since a broken life has no cure,
((and the 'but'should be removed)

also- the as in the last line i think could use some work. im not sure if you wanted it to rhyme with this line or not(And didn't want to go on) if you did i think you should change both, and if you didnt, well the the last line could be much better worded-
ex)
On this suicidal night.
or
He was hurt inside,
And didn't want to live,
So he bade goodbye,
During his suicidal bliss .

i dont kno if you like either, but i do think it needs to be changed at least a little bit.

Hope i helped.

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I found this one really sad rather than dark despite the theme. I liked the way you showd the event from 2 perspectives that was nicely done.
Perhaps a title might be 'Wasted Opportunity' (just a thought)