good job! keep it up!

Great poem! I really liked it! 5/5! keep it up!

wow that was amazing....great job...i love it....the flow was so different from other poems...but i like it so much better it different!! ha well i felt alot of agony in the words...great job 5/5

Interesting, like an argument, a sort of conversation with yourself, another well written poem, kept me hooked all the way through

keep it up

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not your best, but it was a good poem. i can definitely understand what its about

Wow that was an excellent poem! ANd i really liked the ryhme sheme in this was also!

I'm not sure why, but this change in style appeals to me; so different from your other poems. The spaces between the words help tell the story here. I guess sometimes less is more. It makes me wonder how you would have handwritten it, like, how it would have been set out on the page... charming little piece, that.