Well written and rhymes fairly well to. Fair flow. Passionate. X

omg that is so sad! you have such amazing talent with your words omg i cant help but go and to read more!! great job very touching 5/5

That poem was amazing, well done, very intricate and elegant, really mature poem, written very well

this was my favourite stanza

"The swords that sway
and the bullets that fly.
The blood that spatters
and we victims that cry"

This poem really blew me away, well done and keep it up

take care
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hey whassup?! your poem was really good. it gave me an empty feeling, and it made me think of an internal war with ourselves and everyone around us....i really liked it so i'll pass you a 5! Peace and Luv Always, //ari\\

is this possibly a war poem? anyway, it was good. i gave it a 5. thnx for reading mine and commenting.

refering to above post: It seems like You've written in a war form, but about life. Like trying to say life is a battle. Well written, and very deep. Great job!

Take care,
Renee

Exactly. it's a metaphor. The punctures in the heart and back for example....refer to having your heart broken and someone backstabbing you. Glad you got it!

I take this as being about war and our daily struggle. Very well put together and it shows that you thought about it and didn't rush it. Beautifully written. I can't pick a favorite line as I love the whole poem. Perfect piece in my eyes!! Excellent write!! :)

That is so true its scary. A great poem.

you're very talented, i love to see peeps write who know they have the talent to write and put it in a great view like you just did, great job! 5/5

I love poetry that evokes strong images, so that you see it as you read. Poignant title too. You're right, there is no way out of the pain and suffering that life dishes out. Gee, now I'm depressed ;) Great job as always, Christina.