that was super insperational. i loved the rhyme scheme and the format. it was all very good. 5/5

wow! that was a really awesome poem. it's very true to life and it made me think a lot. good job. keep up the good work and take care.

Very beautiful. The repitition was great and so was the rhyme scheme. The rhymes worked however they were very simple. Try a little more complexcity in your rhyming. Great poem! 5/5!