good job i like this. keep writing

that is so good! i love the old fashioned writing, it makes it sound even more meaningful!

oh my god this is absolutely gorgeous. I love the way you've used "olde" english, it gives the poem a much more romantic feel. well done!
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aww. this is so sweet n cute.. such an adorable dedication.. i lovd it, and the old-fashioned way is wat made it this gr8.. it gave it a unique form.. i lovd it..it is so cute :).. it is very deep, too
keep up the talent

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this is good keep up the work make sure u add me to your favorite member and i will do the same for u!

"Please forgive the common above pun."
I think 'above' and 'common' were swapped or something.. the wording isn't grammatically correct, even if this is written in an older style.
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"Before it take its cruel tole upon my health."
'toll' not 'tole'
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"Nay, I won’t have it perfect deer"
'dear' not 'deer'
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Strong ending, and definitely gave me an 'old-time-y' feel.

Something different: Gave an old fashioned feeling. Fraid I won't be much of a help as the poem in itself was good.

Really interesting and sad,i really liked that and i agree some kinda old fashioned for a good way
Well done
Laura

I loved how you wrote it in old fashion. It is not something that you see everyday. It was refreshing. I really liked this poem and I saw nothing wrong with it. I gave it a 5/5.

Overall the writing is pretty good.

I really liked the old form of writing, but it seemed to be mixed up between old and new verse. Example: you used SHANT, but later used SHALL NOT. SHANT seems like an old verse word to me where shall not isn’t. I would try to pick one and stick with it.

Otherwise, a great job.

I enjoyed the powerful words like POLLUTE and BLUNDERS. They really add meaning to the lines.