This is an excellent poem! I really loved this one. I think you should work on the flow of the first stanza though. that last line on the first stanza.....I don't know maybe its just me.
~anne

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Love Sierra

Hey great poem. One of your best poems I've read. Keep up the great work. I really enjoy reading your poems. Oh ya thanks for commenting on mine.

*has fallen in love with ur poems* awsome

Hey i lke this is very good! keep up the good job

I love it