What you wanted to say in this poem was good, but not the structure of the poem. The fact that every line rhymes makes the poem seem a bit dull, and you are not letting your heart speak. Instead, try writing a longer poem where you actually describe the love..make the words come out of the paper (screen). Anyway, nice job. I just think this poem needs to be revised and worked on, but I hope I didn't sound too harsh. Keep writing,
Dorotea