This is nice - Im not normally a sucker for love poems ... BUT.. I actually really enjoyed this, it isnt another "Im so madly in love" poem and it doesnt portray things as perfect because thats not how things are. I admire your courage in writing something so close to you in a poem and allowing others to feel your pain and immerse themselves in it. I apologise that i cant give you any helpful critique but I couldnt really fault your work. Kp writing,
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oh I really like it! it's like I read it in slow motion and the words echoed in my mind....pretty captivating.

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