wonderfuly well written poem...
Some of the lines trip over themselfs though, just maybe work on some of the re-wording.
dont go out of the way for your ryhme, it seems to be a trend for most people, thinking that it always has to ryhme. FOr the most part its a good poem, i like the message, and the point. I hope he got it too. Your making an attempt at tellinghim how much you care, without saying things that are overly used...this is one of the hardest things to do. good poem

~Breeze

Good Good Poem, very Good, keep it Up, Thanx for the Advice on mine, ill get better at it