by jaki Jul 11, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
I stand there and watch as you lie down and hold a dagger above your chest, I am crying and screaming as you slowly lower the dagger through your chest… There is nothing I can do but huddle up in a ball and long for my loved one that lies on the bed… Dead. |
by Lydie
Your writing is good - don't doubt it - but it needs to flow a bit more, the best poems of yours are yet to come, keep writing and you'll get there! It takes practice... Try expanding your poems see what difference that makes! |