this was a really good poem. it had meaning to it. awesome job

nice poem and mine was for. thanks

wow that poem is awesome really really good so much emotion and feeling in it written from the heart great job

that was an awesome poem!!!!! keep writing!! Amanda

ah thanks guys your support means a lot!!

a great poem :D you should sell it to a farmer for a hen and a cow

Awsome poem...i loved it

its gr8 i realy lyk it coz i can sumhow relate....coz i used 2 b so depresed... anyways it so rhymes n goes well wit each other....wish mine was lyk dat anyways....keep it up

Lovely piece. I love the story in it. You can feel her pain while reading it. I loved "crystalline tears" (creative) You definitely portrayed her loneliness and pain. I liked how you repeated the second like but in a different way.

The only suggestion I'd make is to change Ally's to allies.

Nicely done. 5/5

omg! this is an awesome poem... i love it... i know someone where she'd think it's true for her too...
~meg

This was so sad but very very well written. Stay strong even when you think everythings wrong. xX

answer to your question on God---

i wrote this when i was a christian. my beliefs have changed SO much since then that i do declare that there is no god and i believe that very strongly.

i chose to keep this poem up because it shows changes that i go through in the same sense, the one i dedicated to kyle, me and him are best friends now with all of that behind us.

so its there to show change.
but i do see where it might be controversial for me to have that up.

p.s. this poem was VERY good.

OMG LIKE YOU SHOULD SOOO GET AN AWARD FOR THIS ITS AMAZING!!!

lol thanks everyone!

awwww, wow, you are on my favourites too, thanks for the comments, 1/5

Wow this poems really sad. I liked the rhyeming technique you used. Keep up the good work.

wow..big words confuse me >< so i cant use them but ur good with them^^

wow..big words confuse me >< but ur good with them^^ ttyl

you are a very good writer..wow..

I love the way you set it up and I especially like the this line here
"Who would have known that one crystalline tear could tell such a terrible tale"

And if this is about yourself, you should know that their is ALWAYS hope, maybe not for fixing some broken things, but hope for something good to happen in your life. Trust me, I know from experience.