by ---AL--- Jul 12, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
Starlit Sorrow |
Very good.Your good at writing. |
oh, is that true? its so sad! |
by Samantha
Once again I have to commend you on your gigantic talent. My only nitpickings...Third line from the end "where" should be "were", and throughout the poem you change from "she" to "you", though I'm assuming they're both the same person you're referring to. I suggest fixing that, it's not a good habit or a proper thing to do in any form of writing. |
Very good poem! It flowed nicely like all the other poems you have written! |
I like this poem, i realy like the first two lines. they hit a personal note with me. It is very sad. I love how its starts to sound like a breack up, and then, its about how she passed away, and it killed you to lose her. It is just a wonderful poem. One the best i have read on this subject. nicely written. great use of imager to link the ideas. |