Cannot take the agony

by katie!   Jul 13, 2005


** Cannot take the agony **
I'm so tired of running in circles
** Cannot take the agony **
Don't want to be controlled by pain
** Cannot take the agony **
Escape is but a dream, a memory
**Cannot take the agony **
For my mind is telling me to cut again

Whispers get through to me
** Cannot take the agony **
Please let me release my anger
** Cannot take the agony **
Don't love me, I don't deserve you
** Cannot take the agony **
This unending bitter hunger

Let me go
Let me go
Let me go
Let me go

** Cannot take the agony **
But I have to stay, must pretend
** Cannot take the agony **
Let me mutilate my troubles again
** Cannot take the agony **
Don't look at the real me, you wont like it
** Cannot take the agony **
Just let me drown in my blood again

I'm sorry
I love you
Always hate me
Always love you

I have to go, please understand
** Cannot take the agony **
I have to let all my troubles disappear
** Cannot take the agony **
Wish I was stronger so sorry I am weak
** Cannot take the agony **
Leave me, let me go, no need to be here

Bitter, twisted
the real me
Bitter twisted
the real me

*OK.. i saw a good idea by another poet on the site.. I interpreted it like this.. this is my poem.. The bit in the stars is my simple feeling, my mind talking to me*

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  • 19 years ago

    by Natalie84

    I read the whole thing and then read every line but "cannot take the agony" and I have to say I liked it much better without that line. I think you over did it a little with that line. Maybe it would work at the end of every stanza but between every line was a bit much.

    Let me go
    Let me go
    Let me go
    Let me go
    I'm sorry
    I love you
    Always hate me
    Always love you
    Bitter, twisted
    the real me
    Bitter twisted
    the real me
    These lines also took away from the poem a bit. Each of those stanzas flowed a lot differently than the rest of the poem. But then again the uniqueness is refreshing.

    I also don't think the **stars are necessary as they distract from the poem. (My opinion) I think they take away a lot while the reader is trying to keep focused on the words.

    It's your writing I can only make suggestions and let you take them how you want.

    I think this poem would be great if you decided to make a few changes...but fine if you don't. The emotion in the poem really got your feelings across. Nicely done! :)

  • 19 years ago

    by ღ Christina ღ

    very good poem! 5 It flowed nicely ad is very neat!!!

  • 19 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    very unique style, what a great and funny idea....A bit confusing though!!! high 5 for you sweet girl...

    *Love sabrina*

  • 19 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    this is so powerfully sad. of someone running away from a friend who is willing to be there for them, just they don't want to hurt this friend. powerful! i feel so sad now! i hope things are ok!

    ~PLP~ lil slam~

  • 19 years ago

    by rachel

    hey, loved how different this poem is, it works well and is powerful 5/5 well dunxxx

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