yea it really can be a good rock song, like if you have ever heard ]=[ ][ ]V['s (my favorite band, lol :) music style this song would go perfectly for it. But I love it 5/5

i really like this poem. the short lines work realy well. great job xx

I like the flow of this poem, it is VERY well written. sad images, and very dark, but nicely done.

~Breeze

i acctually thought of it as a song from the beggining.....it flowed really good A+ 5/5

I like that. It was cool!

i love the rythm to it, and it's more effective since you've kept the lines short. Very well done!
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i loved the format it really made the poem that much better, i see what you mean when you say it could be a slow rock song, i can totally picture it, and you really can feel the emotion pouring out of this poem, the rythym and flow was awesome, you are an incredible writer
<3 always
cate

i love the short lines and i really think it makes the poem. Great job!

awesome awesome poem. i loved it...5/5

O.o wow. loved it

I really like it too :)

The rythm works well...very touching...and I would love to hear it put to music...

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wonderful rythm, it just blew me away...