by Catty Jul 14, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
I feel life slowly slipping through my fingers, |
by Synyster
Not to sound rude, but this poem was a bit disappointing. It left me wanting more. It seemed unfinished. However, I can sense the spirit you put into the work and I can feel the emotion there. So on that note, you did fairly well. Just work on it a little more and maybe add a few stanzas for better closure. |