that was good to but each line is like longer or shorter you should try to work on that!! and my sugestion for a title can be backstabbed N played! i dont knoe i dont noe how to name them but oh well!!

Hey, i liked this poem, but try making them nito line segments instead of just paragraphs, it might be easier for the reader. Try naming it ripped at the seams. And thanxx for yur comment on my poem, i really appreciated it.
Jenna-xo