Love it...its sad how people ignore others cries for help, because they are so consumed in themselves and don't care about other people.

Hmm, could do with a bit of work but I think that will come with experience. I understand the message which you are trying to portray in this but I think it's a bit over the top - subtlety is sometimes a very effective tool. Anyway, overall this is pretty average but I can see huge potential in your writing. Plz keep it up and I look forward to reading more of your work. Take care,
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i understand the comment you are making, but i dnt think my poem is a bit over the top, that was the first poem i ever wrote so yeh it isn't perfect, but its not really over the top because its only a poem, and tht is how i feel and tht is wat people say to me, and tht is how people act towards me, but ok i guess what your saying is only your opinion.
go and read my other peoms i have put on here, and tell me if u think they are any better!!
luv RaNdOmGaL xxx

thanx you are too!!!!
luv RaNdOmGaL xxx